Dear Diary,
Today I finally told Victor ( Victor is someone that finds stuff you have lost )
about Prosper and Bo. I told him how I lost them and he seemed very surprised. He said how he had looked for animals, suitcases and other stuff but never children. I told him they have been missing for 8 weeks now. He told us we should have gone to him sooner. I knew I didn't like him already. I said they were at their grandfather's house when they ran away. It looked like he was barely listening to me. Because he was on his computer. So I said wow you're not even listening to me I should have gone to another place. He was like no I am listening, I'm just writing things down. I still don't believe him though.
He keeps asking questions like what are their names? What happened to their parents? and If I ever ran away as a child, of course I didn't. I was a good child compared to them.
Anyway, that was my day today. I hated it.
From Esther
Bula Micki,
ReplyDeleteYour diary entry for Esther was great, I liked how you explained what had happened in detail, I found it easy to catch on, without feeling I needed to read the book. My favourite part of the diary entry was the ending as it summarises her day, 'Anyway, that was my day today. I hated it.'.
When I have to do a diary entry, I found it a little hard, as for me, you basically have to retell the story from another person's perspective without knowing in detail how they are feeling. Do you like writing about diary entries?
Next time, you could put a capital letter for the title of the book as it is a proper noun.
Great work,
Zara
Hi Zara,
DeleteThanks for the positive comment on my blog.
I also find it hard to do a diary entry because it doesn't tell us exactly how they feel.
Next time I will add a capital letter for the title.
Thank you for the comment.
Micki
Hey Micki!
ReplyDeleteI really like how you explained this in detail. I found it easy to read. I can easily tell Victor isn't the nicest person. Maybe next time you could add speech marks for when they're talking? Other than that, it's really good! Have a great day!
-Ava
Hi Ava,
DeleteThanks for commenting a positive comment on my blog.
Next time i will read my work over and add speech marks.
Thanks for helping me.
Micki